Many people chose to work or travel for a year before college to what extent do you agree or disagree

As the education system is now more hectic and stressful and expensive
therefore
, many
youth
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chose to do work
for
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meet their
college
expensive or go for some outing for chilling before
the
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college
start. For me, I do agree with
this
and, I do recommend people to take a break of
year
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after the schooling and chill out for a bit
for
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do
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something if they are interested in working can do a job. 
College
is the
next
step of your life and it is the moment in your life when you
dicede
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decide
what you want to be in your future and for that youngster do take a break of a
year
in that some pupil chose for working so that they can meet their academic need and some people go for travelling with their family or by themselves so that they can refresh
themselve
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themselves
before the university
start
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.
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:
Myself
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when I was about to enter
the
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college
I took a one
year
drop because at that time I was so confused I didn't
knew
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what should I have
to
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chose because all
me
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future
was depend
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on that at
last
I came to
this
conclusion that will take a break for
sometime
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and I drop my one
year
and went for a trip in
north
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part of India.  As per me, I do agree people do consider
for
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taking a
year
drop after their school. And in that
year
they can do whatever they want either they can work or can go for outing with family or friends or alone. And make up their mind what they want to chose
next
as entering the academy is
life changing
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for them because whatever they will do their future will
be
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depend
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kn
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on
that.  Overall in short summary taking a
year
gap between the school and
college
is a great idea as entering the university is going to change everything
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and
fir
this
mentally prepared is good.
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