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Is harry potter novel worth to read? Agree or disagree.

#potter #novel
The
book
harry
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 potter and the cursed child is a fascinating most-awaited
book
 by the audience ever, which brings out every
aspects
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 of wizardry boarding along with mysterious life at "Hogwarts school of witchcraft and wizardry". The eighth edition of the series includes new characters
such
 as
Albus
 Potter the son of the title character Harry. The most impressive part of the
book
 is when
Albus
losts
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lost
lasts
 through time and
accidently
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accidentally
 finds evil lord Voldemort who wants to bring out the dark time again and build up his evil army again with the help of
Albus
 who has joined the evil company and joined the evil quest,
then
 the story takes the climax as Harry has to fight his own blood to save the world and sacrificing his son for the truth which grabs my attention giving an emotional story at the end.
Moreover
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 I personally liked the character of
Albus
 as being a child he shows a
lot
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 bravery in between, for me which is far unbelievable
although
 later he joins the evil in the end.
Lastly
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 I would say that Harry Potter and the Cursed Child is very much a strong fiction
book
 as it has all the plot twists and turns and characters and quotes that stay with you long after you have read the
book
 so taking
this
 point I would like to give it
a
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 eight out of ten ratings to the magical
book
.
Submitted by Nishant Chawda on

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