Some people say that in order to be happy, you must have a job you love doing. Others say that other factors are more important. Do you think that people can only be happy if they have a job they really enjoy?

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think that we can only be happy if we have an occupation we desire, while

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others believe that other

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are far more vital. From my perspective , I do believe that a variety of other equally vital

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desirable aim. It is true that getting a desirable

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is the key to happiness. It’s absolutely right that it meets our

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satisfaction based on working performances. No matter how the salary, we still can get it raised even getting promoted when we devote ourselves to doing jobs that we have a passion for.

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to do their occupation on a daily basis.

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, I must argue that contentment in the workplace could

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be achieved through a range of other

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including finance and self-development.

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, if a worker couldn’t earn enough to meet his fundamental needs

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as paying bills, food or putting his kids to school, it is absolutely absurd to continue his enjoyable low-paid

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, especially in a time of economic crisis. My brother,

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, who used to work as a tour guide, decided to surrender his dream work due to low levels of monthly income.

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, another factor influencing happiness is having supportive and loving

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in one’s life. While a fascinating

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may bring

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opportunities to enjoy pleasures, few

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would enjoy them on their own.

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, a good relationship is one of the sources of happiness. If we just focus on

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jobs and neglect our family for a while, we can not turn a house into a home.

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, we are likely to be unhappy. In conclusion, I agree that enjoyable jobs may give

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pleasures.

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has its own drawbacks and benefits. For most

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, other

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are much more significant.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Some people say that in order to be happy, you must have a job you love doing. Others say that other factors are more important. Do you think that people can only be happy if they have a job they really enjoy?

Fully explain your ideas

Last week, you visited a local supermarket and you got satisfactory service. Write a letter to the supermarket manager to thank. In your letter: - introduce yourself; - say why you are satisfied; - say thank you and write about your future visits.

organizing a large family celebration such as a wedding can often create problems. what are the possible problems and solutions?

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. DO you agree or disagree?

Each country has its own charity organizations. Sometimes people think that those organizations should only offer help to their own country while others thinks they are supposed to give aid to people in great need wherever they live. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook, Zalo,...) have a negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?