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School should not force children to learn a foreign language.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In order to make their students multiple
language
 speakers, some educational institutions compel them to learn an international
language
 in
additionally
 to defeat their competitors. Certainly, the objective is good but making it mandatory is a problem right now as the kids are already dumped with many things. I strongly agree with the prompt statement that a child shall not be compelled to study a different subject.
This
 essay supports my view in terms of difficulty and usage.
Firstly
, focus on the international tongue do not make much sense because people are not going to speak it in their place where they are living. By
this
 I mean, it can widely be used in the country where it is vastly spoken. A youngster who has chosen French as his
third
language
,
for instance
, is never going to speak that in India for sure. In fact, the opposite party with whom the young man going to communicate should aware of French.
Therefore
, it involves two sides of the action and
moreover
 learning French is waste of time and energy for him. As the days pass by, he slowly forgets what he has studied.
Secondly
, while pushing a kid to study completely irrelevant, it may cause study syndrome to them.
In other words
, they get confused and find it difficult to understand the terms and techniques that are being practised in the
language
.
For example
, as a learner who is already fed up with studying maths and science, is again pushed to go through another hard subject, in
such
 case, he may totally hate education.
Although
 he does not know about it, he is still compelled to get good marks in it which seems like a burden.
Hence
, it is not good to dump on a kid. In conclusion, I would say that unless a person likes to learn an international
language
, he should not be compelled to learn it.
Submitted by bjbharathkumar on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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