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Smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death throughout the world today. In the interest of public health, governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products. Do you agree or disagree?

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In modern times, the issue of
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smoking topic has become highly controversial. There are those who say that smoking should lead to important ailment among the public
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 others believe that it should not. In
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 essay, I will examine both sides of the argument and provide my overall opinion. Generally speaking, there is a wide range of reasons why
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 believe that smoking affects the health of
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 throughout the world. Perhaps the main reasons why community are in favour of smoking banning is
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 the rate of illness between smoking human increase rapidly , especially in poor countries
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 as Nigeria, Nepal. A good illustration of
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 that folk ,who are not smoking, can live up to 100 olds. If experts raise awareness of
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 about the dangers of smoking, they should end smoking. Despite these arguments, there is
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 a case for the idea that smoking production is quite important for farmers. Perhaps the main reasons why
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 think that there are more and more farmers living by growing it.
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 is because the government did not invest in
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 town in the past. If the government think that smoking must be banned, they must think these human being. In conclusion,
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 is a topic which is very relevant to modern society. Despite arguments to the contrary , ı feel that smoking should be banned among young
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 , especially between 13 to 20. If we do not block smoking product among these
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, there should be pretty nervous
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 years.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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