More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowle
In rich
nations
more and more children
are becoming obese due to the kind of life
syle
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style
the
are leading. Correct your spelling
they
This
is mainly because of sedentary
lifestyle and the consumption of unhealthy foods. Add an article
the sedentary
a sedentary
This
essay will explore these causes in detail below giving the negative results they bring.
To begin
with, in this
modern time a lot of children
spend their time indoors playing games on their smart phones
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smartphones
,
or watching television.Remove the comma
apply
For example
, these young children
are doing online school and after school
they will just Add a comma
,school
countinue
to use their gadgets to play games. Correct your spelling
continue
Therefore
they do not have time to exercise by moving around or playing outside which will result in them bieng
overweight. Correct your spelling
being
Furthermore
,eating junk foods on a daily basis because it is readily available and affordable in wealthy nations
, further
worsens the problem.This
is because these foods have a lot of calories which are not good for consumption. A number of children
fall victims of
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this
unhealthy liiving
result in them being obese.
Following the above discussion, Correct your spelling
living
obsesity
in young individuals will mainly lead to Correct your spelling
obesity
boring
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a boring
life
. In other words
, they will fail to enjoy life
as
other Replace the word
like
children
, as they will be inactive . A lot of children
who face bullying in developed nations
are overweight , they will also
feel neglected and fail to mingle with their peers. As a result
self esteem
is compromised which does not only affect their childhood but adult Add a hyphen
self-esteem
life
as well. Effects of obestity
are so detrimental to individuals day to day living.
To conclude, young people in wealthy Correct your spelling
obesity
nations
fell prey to unhealthy lifestyle naturally which will cause them to live an unpleasanty
childhood. Adults had a role of monitoring their Correct your spelling
unpleasant
unpleasantly
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children's
children
childrens
way of living so that they will adhere to healthy ways of Change to a genitive case
children's
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