More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowle
In rich
nations
more and more Use synonyms
children
are becoming obese due to the kind of Use synonyms
life
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style
the
are leading. Correct your spelling
they
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sedentary
lifestyle and the consumption of unhealthy foods. Add an article
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essay will explore these causes in detail below giving the negative results they bring.
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modern time a lot of Linking Words
children
spend their time indoors playing games on their Use synonyms
smart phones
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smartphones
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apply
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children
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they will just Add a comma
,school
countinue
to use their gadgets to play games. Correct your spelling
continue
Therefore
they do not have time to exercise by moving around or playing outside which will result in them Linking Words
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overweight. Correct your spelling
being
Furthermore
,eating junk foods on a daily basis because it is readily available and affordable in wealthy Linking Words
nations
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further
worsens the problem.Linking Words
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is because these foods have a lot of calories which are not good for consumption. A number of Linking Words
children
fall victims Use synonyms
of
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unhealthy Linking Words
liiving
result in them being obese.
Following the above discussion, Correct your spelling
living
obsesity
in young individuals will mainly lead to Correct your spelling
obesity
boring
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a boring
life
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In other words
, they will fail to enjoy Linking Words
life
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as
other Replace the word
like
children
, as they will be inactive . A lot of Use synonyms
children
who face bullying in developed Use synonyms
nations
are overweight , they will Use synonyms
also
feel neglected and fail to mingle with their peers. Linking Words
As a result
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self esteem
is compromised which does not only affect their childhood but adult Add a hyphen
self-esteem
life
as well. Effects of Use synonyms
obestity
are so detrimental to individuals day to day living.
To conclude, young people in wealthy Correct your spelling
obesity
nations
fell prey to unhealthy lifestyle naturally which will cause them to live an Use synonyms
unpleasanty
childhood. Adults had a role of monitoring their Correct your spelling
unpleasant
unpleasantly
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children's
children
childrens
way of living so that they will adhere to healthy ways of Change to a genitive case
children's
life
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