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Some people think technology makes life complex, so we should make life simpler without using technology. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #technology #life
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IN MODERN TIMES, THE ISSUE OF EFFECT OF TECH ON LIFE HAS BECOME HIGHLY CONTROVERSIAL. THERE ARE THOSE WHO SAY THAT INNOVATIONS SHOULD AFFECT OUR LIFE ,
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 OTHERS BELIEVE THAT THEY SHOULD NOT.IN
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 ESSAY I WILL EXAMINE BOTH SIDES OF THE ARGUMENT AND PROVIDE MY OVERALL OPINION. GENERALLY SPEAKING, THERE IS A WIDE RANGE OF REASONS WHY PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT TECHNOLOGY LEAD TO BAD EFFECT ON HUMAN BEINGS. PERHAPS THE MAIN REASONS WHY PEOPLE WHY PEOPLE THINK THAT
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 IDEA IS BECAUSE
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 THERE ARE A FEW STORES IN THE TOWNS, PUBLİC SHOULD FIND MORE AND MORE SHOPPING CENTRES BY USING
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 AS GOOGLE, WHICH IS QUITE BIG SEARHING APPLICATION THROUGHOUT WORLDS.
AS A RESULT
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, OUR LIFE SHOULD BE MIXED BY MEANS OF
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, WHICH IS ONE FROM BID EVENTS ABOUT TECH. IF WE CONTINUE TO USE
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 WAY, WE SHOULD BE ADDICTED HUMAN BEING IN
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 YEARS. DESPİTE THES ARGUMENTS THERE IS
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 A CASE FOR THE IDEA THAT TECHNOLOGICAL EVENTS ARE IMPORTANT FOR US. PERHAPS THE MAIN REASON WHY FOLK THINK THAT
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 IDEA IS BECAUSE PHONE SHOULD BE EASLY FOR PUBLIC , ESPECIALLY CROWD LIVING IN FAR PLACES FROM NEIGHBOURHOOD. A GOOD ILLUSTRATION OF
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 THAT PUPIL GOING TO OTHER CITY FOR EDUCATION SHOULD CALL HIM OR HER FAMILY BY USING SMARTPHONE. IF WE USE TECHNOLOGY EFFECTIVELY , OUR LIVES SHOULD BE SIMPLER THAN PAST DATES. IN CONCLUSION,
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 IS A TOPIC WHICH IS VERY RELEVANT TO MODERN SOCIETY. DESPITE ARGUMENTS TO THE CONTRARY, I FEEL THAT TECHNOLOGICAL EVENTS
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,TRANSPORTATION, BUILDING SHOULD LEAD TO EFFECT TO US AS GOOD. IF THERE ARE NOT TECH LIKE IN
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 TODAYS, WE WOULD BE LIVE AS POOR LIKE PAST DAYS.
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