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Smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death throughout the world today. In the interest of public health, governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products. Do you agree or disagree?

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Consumption
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 of
tobacco
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 and Smoking is very injurious to
health
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. In recent times, smoking has proven to be a significant reason for serious
health
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 issues and mortality all over the world. I extend my support for the betterment of people's interest, the government should put a strict ban on the
consumption
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 of
tobacco
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products
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 and cigarettes.
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, smoking and
tobacco
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products
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 cause mouth and lung cancer in the human's body.
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, medical facilities have improved yet curing the patient completely becomes impossible for highly qualified doctors.As per a recent report in the leading
health
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 magazine, every 5 out of 10 people will develop mouth or lung cancer of stage 4 caused by the smoking habit or consuming
tobacco
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products
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. Out of those 5, the possibility of 2 deaths is very high.
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, it is important to put a curb on these things.
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, a non-smoker will get highly affected by just standing
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 to the smoker.
This
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 is called passive smoking. Passive smoking eventually leads to many breathing-related
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 issues. Some can
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 lead to incurable diseases or severe illness.
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, small children are the ones who develop a breathing problem like asthma due to passive smoking. In conclusion, the
consumption
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 of cigarettes and
tobacco
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products
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 not only affects the person who is consuming it but
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 affects a non-user. They are turning out to be the major death cause in many as it leads to cancer.
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, I agree that for the betterment of society, the government should put a stringent ban on the
consumption
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 of
such
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products
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 which are very harmful to human
health
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