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Many people think cheap air travel should be encouraged because it give ordinary people freedom to travel further. However, others think this leads to Environmental problem, so air travel should be more expensive in order to discourage people from having it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Today many communities assume that governments need to motivate travel companies that have low costs of tickets by aeroplanes,
otherwise
 there is necessary to set high prices. Frequent air journeys help the nation to care for the depression or stress but it might break enormous amounts of stages in nature. I considerably try to describe these both opinions. On the one hand,
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society with low budgets deserves a good rest in their routine from home to work.
First
, many countries increase tourism by budget travelling because the population have rest from their typical places and the crowd become more confident with mental health by national events.
Second
, arriving at a new point evolves the outlook of folk.
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, the department of health care of Boston university demonstrates the statistic which proves the influence on people by common adventures. According to the percentage, half part of the crowd lost physiological problem after including national air company which offers the lowest tickets in the USA in 1998.
Therefore
, even venture has drawbacks, but it solves the more important problem as the health of the nation.
On the other hand
, aircraft affect our nature by fossil fuels which destroy the regular work of the natural cycle. One of the reasons for global warm is planes which become famous for transport in the
last
 times because carbon dioxide from fossil fuels includes toxic steam which kills animals and plants.
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, the international airport in Berlin showed that one of the six planes change the climate in Germany by 1 per cent. In conclusion, the cheap tickets are the request for simple workers,
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 it can bring a total problem as Global warm.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Democratic travel
  • Global diversity
  • Economic benefits
  • Service sector
  • Educational travel
  • International relationships
  • Carbon emissions
  • Global warming
  • Climate crisis
  • Overtourism
  • Infrastructure
  • Cultural heritage
  • Sustainable aviation
  • Carbon offset
  • Global inequality
  • Airline industry
  • Economic downturn
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