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Completing university is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job,other people believe that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and gibe your opinion.

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In recent times, it is widely believed that attaining a university degree is the best way to secure a lucrative job, while others suggest that widespread experience and skill acquisition are more valuable. In my opinion, I agree with the later because
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university is a prerequisite for securing professional jobs. On the one hand, for one to be hired as a professional, a degree certificate must be tendered. Eligibility for
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 in most professional and high- tech facilities like medical facilities, law firms and engineering companies require
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evidence of university completion. Some workers,
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, doctors, lawyers and engineers must show their certificates, and in some peculiarities, additional documents
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license to practice in order to be fit for
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, being handy and experienced can guarantee
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. Achieving an independent financial source is a need in most developing countries
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 of white-collar jobs. For
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 illustration, almost all African billionaires started on a small scale as shoemakers, caterers, tailors, carpenters and other skilled labour before expanding to a global conglomerate. In conclusion,having a degree is seen as a yardstick for getting a good job, while acquiring skills and experience are viewed as more important. I am of the opinion that skill acquisition and garnering of experience should be encouraged since it can promote
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 recommend that people should venture into skill acquisition especially those not aiming to be professionals.
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