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In the past, most people spend their entire career working for one company, whereas people nowadays move from one job to another. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each? Which do you think is better? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People
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 like to
work
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 in an environment which is
condusive
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conducive
 to them. Job satisfaction depends on various factors like time, money, proximity.
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people
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 switch from
one
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company
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 to another, if they are unsatisfied.
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 and cons of staying at
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 organisation throughout or shifting to different companies. There are some
people
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 who thrive for success who prefer money over stability. Mostly,
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 habit is visible when a person
start
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 their career. Because
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 age group consist of young individuals, they have the stamina and greed to achieve what they want.
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, a
sales person
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 will prefer going to a
company
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who
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 offers
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higher pay, as the
work
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 environment is similar. Since they move
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one
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 place to another, getting a higher incentive will only be profitable.
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,
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 can be a downfall if the long run, as the person does not have much stability and can be tiring to start from
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scratch. Meanwhile, there exist a group of
people
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 who have worked their whole working career in a
company
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.
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this
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 does not give much exposure in the industry, it definitely creates a stable relationship with other employees.
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, my mother worked 24 years in
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company
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 till she retired. The
company
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 was her
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 home and the
work
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 environment mattered, not the income; as it was sufficient.
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work place
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workplace
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 which meets my criteria and stay, rather than changing jobs. At times, it is important to choose happiness and satisfaction rather than choosing monetary gains.
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