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Some believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, while others feel that crime is being tackled effectively now. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some are on the view that precautions taken to reduce
crime
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is
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 not sufficient, while others think the dilemma is been controlled effectively. I strongly believe that more sturn actions must be taken to eradicate
crime
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 from
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society. Increasing cases of
crime
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 around the
world
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 have crippled many societies around the
world
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.
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 with, more countries are facing threats from organized gang groups to
distrupt
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disrupt
 the daily livelihood of the
people
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. As an example, Mexico which is one of the places where gang violence is spreading without any control is considered to be the safest place
to
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people
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 who are convicted
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of
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crime
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 to find asylum.
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 to
this
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,
people
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 must pay a percentage
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 their daily income to make sure that they
dont
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don't
 get murdered by
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people
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.
Finally
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, country's and
world
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 organizations should ratify global platforms to make sure that the proper funding and intelligence is shared to prevent the surge of
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 social
mennace
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menace
 which is destroying many families around the
world
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.
On the other hand
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, countries are taking preventive measures to address
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 issue.
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, it is evident that organizations
such
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 as United Nation's have come to the forefront in starting a
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 on the importance of eradicating
crime
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 in
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society to make a brighter future for the
next
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 generation.
Secondly
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, more and countries are signing agreements when it comes to sharing actionable intelligence with the security forces so that they can take
strun
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strong
stern
 actions.
last
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 but not the least,
people
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 are coming up strongly nowadays to complain and share information with the police when
such
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 incidents occur. In conclusion,
eventhough
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even though
 there are adequate actions
which
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that
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 are visible in the
world
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 when it comes to preventing
crime
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, more and more intervention from the government is needed to
controll
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control
 the situation so that it will not have serious issues in the future.

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