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Some people believe that celebrating personal events is a waste of money. Others feel that these celebrations play an important role in the lives of individuals and in society as a whole. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Celebrating events is
one
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 of the old tradition.
family
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the family
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 believe that these occasions play a key role in
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's life and in society as well but on the other ,hand many consider
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 as salary wasted. Many believe that special events should be celebrated grandly.
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 is the only way to get together and share joys with each other
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 everyone is busy in their own life. Let us take the example of marriage as it happens once in a lifetime so
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 celebrate it in a grand way . They decorate their homes and make sweets.
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 can only be done by spending a huge amount of wage. On the counterpart, others think of these events as a total waste of wealth because they think that
one
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 should not spend a huge amount of payment for a
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 or two-day affair. In spite of spending huge dollars on parties or ,get-togethers
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the community
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 should save
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 cash and should help the poor population in their bad times. They should fulfil their daily needs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lavish parties
  • essential expenditures
  • financial stress
  • lasting memories
  • social bonds
  • emotional support
  • familial and social ties
  • mental health
  • community cohesion
  • cultural heritage
  • sense of identity
  • traditional practices
  • sense of belonging
  • continuity
  • unique cultural aspects
  • personal well-being
  • routine
  • life satisfaction
  • reasonable budget
  • cost-effective
  • potluck parties
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