Some people believe that celebrating personal events is a waste of money. Others feel that these celebrations play an important role in the lives of individuals and in society as a whole. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Celebrating events is
one
of the old tradition.
family
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the family
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believe that these occasions play a key role in
one
's life and in society as well but on the other ,hand many consider
this
as salary wasted. Many believe that special events should be celebrated grandly.
This
is the only way to get together and share joys with each other
otherwise
everyone is busy in their own life. Let us take the example of marriage as it happens once in a lifetime so
crowd
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the crowd
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celebrate it in a grand way . They decorate their homes and make sweets.
This
can only be done by spending a huge amount of wage. On the counterpart, others think of these events as a total waste of wealth because they think that
one
should not spend a huge amount of payment for a
one
or two-day affair. In spite of spending huge dollars on parties or ,get-togethers
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the community
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should save
this
cash and should help the poor population in their bad times. They should fulfil their daily needs.
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