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In the modern world, it is possible to shop, work, and communicate online without any face-to-face contact with other people. Is this a positive or negative development?

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With the advancement in
technology
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 everything we require in life is available merely one click away. It has become fairly easy to buy things, to
work
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 or to talk to
others
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 without any physical contact with
others
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.
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,
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 essay will discuss the pros of online connectivity and
secondly
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 the negative impacts
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it.
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 with, the internet has bestowed upon us a vast trove of possibilities which have made our life convenient. With the introduction of
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e-commerce websites, shopping for necessities like clothing, groceries
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 become easier without being hackled by a salesperson.
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, in the current pandemic time working from home culture is being adopted by many organizations. As
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 has become a common norm, coworkers are rarely meeting each other in person and are communicating with each other more through
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online connecting platforms like zoom and
microsoft
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 teams. As people do not have to go to
office
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the office
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 they are free to reside in any part of the world and
work
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 remotely. They can easily be in touch with
others
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 living in another country through social media platforms.
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, there are various negative aspects of spending time online without social interactions. Due to the lack of physical interactions, individuals might fail to develop an emotional connection.It reduces the interpersonal relationships between people.
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, while shopping online for clothing
someconsumers
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some consumers
 might miss the services and suggestions usually offered by sales staff. In the job scenarios, co-workers might find it troubling to discuss ideas online and it might not be as productive as physical discussions. In conclusion,
eventhough
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even though
 it is favourable to shop,
work
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 and communicate online, it has its negative factors like lack of emotional and
interpesonal
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interpersonal
 relationships. In my opinion, I would prefer to shop
at
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 stores or
work
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 in an office building so that I can easily communicate with
others
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