Some people think that money must be spent on promoting the use of bicycles in cities while others think cities must spend on public transport discuss both views and give your opinion

It is true that some people prefer the development of
bicycle
tracts within the
city
for the movement but some others prefer the improvement of public
transport
. I believe
both
modes of
transports
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are having
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their own pros and cons.
Therefore
money should appropriately
spend
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on
both
methods to get an effective transportation network. Promoting cycling within the
city
is a well-proven alternative not only to ease traffic congestion but
also
to promote the 'go green' environmental concerns. Nowadays, modern metropolises are
build
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up with cycling paths adjoining the main roads.
Usually
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trees are planted along the bike tracts to provide
shades
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for the riders. Riding a bike to and for work
reduce
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dependency on other
transport
modes
such
as bus, car or motorbike.
Therefore
, it will reduce the demand for fuel-consuming vehicles on the roads,
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as
the
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results
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carbon footprint, global warming and air pollution
would
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be reduced to a great extent. France and Belgium are famous for their
city
bicycle
riding paths. By investing in
bicycle
tracts those countries have successfully reduced the number of
the
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vehicle
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in the major
municipality
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.
On the other hand
, it is impossible to go everywhere by
bicycle
. We need a good public
transport
system to reach
the
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far away and difficult places,
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when there are good and efficient public
transport
system people would not use their own or private vehicles. It is proven in many surveys that private wheels are the main cause of traffic congestion in main cities. For example, forty people can be accommodated on a bus without any problem,
whereas
for forty cars we need more space. Investing in public
transport
is
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really
valued
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development. Most of the developed countries successfully used
this
strategy to ease traffic congestion in major
town
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. In conclusion, investing in
both
; bicycles and public
transport
are good alternatives to improve transportation within the
city
limits
both
methods should be combined in an appropriate way to get the maximum benefits.
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task response
Good job in addressing both views and presenting a balanced argument. Ensure to provide a clear opinion in the introduction.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with well-connected ideas. Try to use linking words and cohesive devices more consistently to improve coherence.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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