Some people feel that young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others, however, believe that young people should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some
people
argue that traditions in
society
should be followed by youngsters.
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other views, they have a right to live in their own ways.
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also
explain why both vital elements for youngsters On the one hand, some traditional value
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certainly applicable to the modern world.
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some activities day-to-day like
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greeting culture with
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person to show respect toward them
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is a cultural tradition from generation to generation.
This
is especially true for relations between multi-generation in a family as well as
society
.
Moreover
, it is important to dress modestly in the special place of worship as church, temples,
this
shows appreciation for God or their ancestors.
Although
society
changes,
people
should remain some traditional values
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cannot change, it is a foundation rule necessary in their life.
On the other hand
, in spite of some values of the other view given about, I believe that youngers
also
should be free to do anything that they want appropriately.
Firstly
, young
people
are living in a fast-paced world very different from the old generations, almost the culture and tradition are outdated,
therefore
, unfaired to them follow.
That is
the reasons, changing their lifestyles is one of the light
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to assist young generations from fast adapting to new environments and developing, even able to enhance their innovation and creativity.
Secondly
, removing barriers from
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social and old-fashioned prejudice will lead to gender
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in youngsters.
For example
, As a default, women continue to form a large majority of the working poor, earn less income, voiceless than men,
therefore
, girl teenagers should have their own roads to prove the position and power of women in
society
today. In conclusion, good traditions should be passed on and young
people
should respect these traditions, but they should combine with their innovation new things. I concede that each view
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their meaning, so balancing it can become a perfect person.
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