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Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is true that some people contend that economic
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 is the only solution to the global problems of hunger and poverty. Others,
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, argue for an end to economic
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 to conserve our environment. I agree completely with
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 view. Those who see economic
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 alone as the sole cure for the tragedy of world hunger and poverty propose one major argument. Only the
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 of the economies of the developing countries will provide the poor with the wealth to afford the basic necessities of life. The profits made by corporations who are responsible for
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 will trickle down in the form of financial benefits to be enjoyed by the starving and needy.
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 view has justified the age of imperialism and the destruction of the livelihood of millions in the name of progress.
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, there are countless examples to support the opposing view that economic
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 results in environmental destruction.
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 is true for developing countries, where lowland rainforests have been cleared and unsustainable agricultural practices introduced to produce cash crops, often for export.
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, it is
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 true for developed economies.
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, the continued use of fossil fuels, which provide the energy for growing industrialization, causes global warming.
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 leads to a rise in sea levels, which will eventually make tens of millions of poor people in Bangladesh homeless. In conclusion, the economic
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 which is not sustainable
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 must be stopped. If it is not based on meeting human needs rather than generating profits,
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growth
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 will only create more poverty and lead to more hunger in the world by destroying natural resources.
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