Some people think that introducing new technology can improve people's quality of life in the developing countries. However, others believe that free education should be offered. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Education and
technology
both
are accelerating
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better future. Some
people
think that nation’s standard of living could be increased by commencing the
technology
but other
opion
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option
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to the costless study. According to
me
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,
both
the factors are equally responsible which I shall discuss in
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paragraphs with my own opinion.
Firstly
, looking towards new
technology
, necessity is the mother of invention.
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our tools of
technology
could solve the drastic problems that we are facing in today’s world.
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, using hydro or electrical transportation would
leads
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to
the
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air pollution free environment, no global warming and use recycling and biodegradable products for
domestic
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purpose would eliminate human to cater
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problem of
atmosphere
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.
Secondly
, colonization into other planet
bring
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the
second
chance for
human
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to survive,
for instance
, according to the survey conducted by the NASA stated that moving into the new planet and restart the life over there will be end up soon in 2025.
This
is
also
a piece of
technology
which support
the
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people
’s life. Education is the right of every individual and the backbone of every nation in order to develop it economically and financially.
However
, in many countries, studying
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the
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colleges and universities could be
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challenge
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for them because of not enough to pay the course fee.
Study
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brings the fascination among
people
to learn the morality, equality and have
sense
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of fraternity towards nature and social groups around them.
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,
mindset
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the mindset
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of every
people
would be more careful and concerned about the development of the country. In conclusion, I believe that
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both
requires
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equal
attentions
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attention
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in order to the development and welfare of the
people
in any country.
Both
plays
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their magnificent role
into
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the country.
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