Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The dependency amongst humans has increased in the modern era has been thought by many individuals. Contrary to
this
belief, others oppose that
people
are able to live freely without any help. In my opinion,
people
have assimilated the more individualistic lifestyles,
nevertheless
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more
people
are needing each other's help to flourish life
conditions
and improving knowledge about the world. The aim of
this
essay is to discuss the argument with the merits and the demerits. On the one hand, it is important to bear in mind that humans are
social
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animal and for
this
reason
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they should be live together
regardless
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conditions
and
time
that they have been living. Especially,
people
have remembered
importance
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the importance
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of their relatives and friends in the pandemic.
Furthermore
,
people
wants
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to achieve more at
this
time
in order to create
better
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future for themself.
Therefore
,
the
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co-operation and partnership have been increased between nations and
socities
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societies
.
For instance
, there are many global
project
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projects
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have been supported by international communities
such
as
,
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deep marine search and as a consequence of it, doubtlessly the connectivity of humans are increased in the modern
time
due to desire of improving knowledge.
Therefore
, the world is becoming a global village.
On the other hand
, there is no doubt that
people
have started to be aware of their presence and it has pushed them to think more individualistic with the advent of technology in modern times.
For example
, it can be seen clearly, families were more crowded and
people
relied on their families for ameliorating life
conditions
. In
this
way, the shared work has been reduced in the past.
Instead
of
this
, the behaviour of
people
have changed in
the
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modern
time
and the downward trends in the numbers of family members can be seen owing to fewer physical work and societies' dynamics.
Thus
, it is noticeable that
life
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conditions
have changed and
people
can adapt to live independently. To summarize,
although
some individuals have thought that connections of
people
have been increased in
the
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modern
time
, others have argued the opposite opinion.
This
essay demonstrated that
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lifestyle of
people
changed to the small groups, the worlds have become global villages and for
this
reason, the co-operations and dependency are increasing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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