Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The dependency amongst humans has increased in the modern era has been thought by many individuals. Contrary to
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belief, others oppose that
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are able to live freely without any help. In my opinion,
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have assimilated the more individualistic lifestyles,
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more
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are needing each other's help to flourish life
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and improving knowledge about the world. The aim of
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essay is to discuss the argument with the merits and the demerits. On the one hand, it is important to bear in mind that humans are
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animal and for
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reason
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they should be live together
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and
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that they have been living. Especially,
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have remembered
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of their relatives and friends in the pandemic.
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,
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to achieve more at
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in order to create
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future for themself.
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,
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co-operation and partnership have been increased between nations and
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societies
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, there are many global
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have been supported by international communities
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deep marine search and as a consequence of it, doubtlessly the connectivity of humans are increased in the modern
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due to desire of improving knowledge.
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, the world is becoming a global village.
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, there is no doubt that
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have started to be aware of their presence and it has pushed them to think more individualistic with the advent of technology in modern times.
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, it can be seen clearly, families were more crowded and
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relied on their families for ameliorating life
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. In
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way, the shared work has been reduced in the past.
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of
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, the behaviour of
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have changed in
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modern
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and the downward trends in the numbers of family members can be seen owing to fewer physical work and societies' dynamics.
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, it is noticeable that
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conditions
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have changed and
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can adapt to live independently. To summarize,
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some individuals have thought that connections of
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have been increased in
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modern
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, others have argued the opposite opinion.
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lifestyle of
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changed to the small groups, the worlds have become global villages and for
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reason, the co-operations and dependency are increasing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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