People in major cities suffer from high levels of air pollution that causes health problems for many. Explain possible reasons for this problem and suggest some solutions.

Air
pollution
is a common debate for nowadays inhabitants of most
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metropolitan
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cities. In some cases
this
degrading
air
bring
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with it
healthy
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problem for the residents and the blame can be given to several causes. Even though there are some various probable solutions to lessen the impact of
air
pollution
.
Firstly
, an obvious but significant reason could be founded in the increment of the vehicle's number in the cities. In
fact
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the advancement of technology has helped bring the cost of production lower thereby making it for the masses to afford a private car.
Secondly
,
suburbs
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of metropolises
are often place
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for factories' production that with its dangerous emissions contributes to the degradation of the
air
. The
third
problem comes from domestic fuel burning that, contrary to what one might think, constitutes one of the most relevant causes. Due to
decreasing
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of the
air
quality index and the always larger number of health problems caused by
air
pollution
, governments should start providing different solutions. On one hand, in order to reduce the number of private
vehicles
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politicians could act with restrictive laws which
penalizes
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owners of combustion cars or introduce taxes for the possession of
a
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second
automobiles.
On the other
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countries should choose to increase the public e-transports and at the same time make it more affordable than the price of fuel.
In addition
, a relevant way to reduce the percentage of dangerous particles in the
air
could be using renewable energy,
such
as
solar
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panel for warming houses or wind turbines to replace
production
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energy of the factories. To conclude, the worldly picture of the severity of diseases caused by
air
pollution
is drastic, health problems continue multiplying for many reasons. Despite there are some governments already act to reduce carbon emissions I am convinced that many
others
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solution could still be
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instituted
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