IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

International travel is becoming cheaper and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourist. Do the advantages of increased tourists outweigh disadvantages.

#travel #countries #doors #tourist #tourists
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Travelleing
Correct your spelling
Travelling
 to different
countries
Use synonyms
 by
tourists
Use synonyms
 had increased from the past years due to cheap travel prices. Some
poeple
Correct your spelling
people
 consider
this
Linking Words
 is beneficial whilst others have a contrasting viewpoint. There is
benifit
Correct your spelling
benefit
benefits
 of economic development of the host
countries
Use synonyms
;
nevertheless
Linking Words
,
tourists
Use synonyms
 destroy national heritage. On one hand, more
tourists
Use synonyms
 help the host
countries
Use synonyms
 economically.
Tourists
Use synonyms
 boost the economy. They
visit
Use synonyms
 these nations and buy
things
Use synonyms
. They shop
expensive
Change preposition
for expensive
show examples
 items. For their stay, they pick good
accomodations
Correct your spelling
accommodations
 which boost the hotel
indutries
Correct your spelling
industries
. They buy local products which are hand-made which boost handicraft industries. The local people earn a good amount due to these visitors.
For example
Linking Words
, Rajasthani bangles are bought by the foreigners who
visit
Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
 place which
help
Change the verb form
helps
show examples
 these local sellers.
This
Linking Words
 is the biggest advantage of
increasing
Correct article usage
the increasing
show examples
 number of
tourists
Use synonyms
 due to cheap travel.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the biggest disadvantage is
Linking Words
this
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
that these
tourists
Use synonyms
 destroy the
prestigeous
Correct your spelling
prestigious
 heritage of the host
countries
Use synonyms
. Some of them
visit
Use synonyms
 historical palaces,
meuseum
Correct your spelling
museum
museums
 and touch everything. Some buildings and
things
Use synonyms
 displayed there
aredelicate
Correct your spelling
are delicate
 which could be destroyed. These should be preserved carefully but some visitors do not understand
this
Linking Words
 which eventually cause loss of these valuable
things
Use synonyms
.
For example
Linking Words
, in India, foreigners who
visit
Use synonyms
meuseum
Correct your spelling
museum
museums
 do not pay attention to instructions and try to touch
things
Use synonyms
 exhibited. In conclusion, travelling is boosting the economy of nations by increasing revenue of
differnt
Correct your spelling
different
 industries.
This
Linking Words
 has a few disadvantages too, some
tourists
Use synonyms
 destroy the valuable items.
Submitted by Priya on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: