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ome people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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The argument in favour of being vegetarian is that wildlife gets preserved which is crucial for our eco-system.
For instance
, it is emphasized that to protect and intact nature in its original form, its necessary to let animals or other species roam freely. To demonstrate a study was conducted in Harvard where they shifted animals from their original inhabitants, and in three months time the area was effected badly by insects and snakes etc.
Moreover
, environment activists argue that the life to live is the fundamental right of every living organism and it must not be taken away un-natural i.e hunting or sacrificing them for feeding.
Hence
, every living specie should complete its life cycle.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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