Some people believe that family is more important than friends. To what extend do you agree or disagree

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Some people claim that the importance of
family
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circle is greater than the
friends
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we meet in our
life
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. I would strongly agree
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the above which
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a proper individual to the society. The bond and the influence that a
person
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gets from their own family is priceless.
Firstly
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, from the
first
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day a child start walking
parents
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make sure that his or her child is given the best things even at the cost of their own comfort. As an example, there are many
parents
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who would stay hungry
untill
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until
their children have been fed for the sake of their love.
In addition
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to
this
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, once they become grown adults the advice and the guidance that they get from the
parents
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and their
grand
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parents
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can be vital to have a
balance
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balanced
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family
life
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.
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, it is evident that
when ever
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whenever
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a
person
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is in trouble they always run towards
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the family since they trust that they will be there to hold them when they are unable to stand up on their own.
On the other hand
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,
friends
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can play an
intergral
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integral
part
of
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in
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a
persons
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life
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as well. To being with, once a child start's to explore and going
for
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to
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school the
friends
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they make will decide the values that they will incorporate
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into
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their
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life style
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lifestyle
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. As an example, social research
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proven that if a
person
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makes
friends
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who posses bad ethics and values the probability of the
person
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also
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falling to the same track is much greater.
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,
friends
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with the correct values and discipline can help a
person
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to grow but will result
otherwise
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if they are not. In conclusion, even though
friends
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can be considered as an important part of
ones
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life
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the impact and the
belonginess
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belongingness
belongings
the family brings is far
more
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greater which cannot
be replace
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be replaced
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by a friend.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bond
  • support
  • unconditional love
  • shared values
  • mutual understanding
  • trust
  • emotional well-being
  • interdependence
  • societal norms
  • companionship
  • loyalty
  • advice
  • experiences
  • mentorship
  • trustworthy
  • reliable
  • reliable
  • cherish
  • strengthen
  • deepen
  • attach importance to
  • prioritize
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