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One of the common practice to
discipline
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children
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 is by using physical
force
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. While some people argue that
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 is for the betterment of the
children
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, others claim that
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 affects the mental and physical health of the
children
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. In my ,opinion using physical
force
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 to
discipline
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children
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 is a heinous act.
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 with, most parents are of the misconception that the use of physical
force
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 will help their
children
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 in the long run. They fail to understand the adverse effect it has on their
children
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. If physical
force
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 is used to control the
children
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, it could develop a psychological problem that could affect their adolescence. In a psychological study, there is relevance to the physical
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 or abuse in childhood to the aggressive nature of a human. People who experience it as a child might take violence as a solution for all the problems.
In addition
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 to the above,
children
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 are vulnerable and the use of
force
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 could harm their physical growth. In the act of disciplining the
children
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 parents could end up hurting them in the
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 place.
This
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 could
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 be considered as taking advantage of their innocence. In recent times, many countries have recognised the use of physical
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 on
children
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 by parents or a guardian as a punishable offence. I believe every country should incorporate strict laws against
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 violence,
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 would encourage the parent to take up alternate and proven methods to
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 their
children
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. To sum up, I am not in favour of using physical
force
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 as a method to
discipline
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children
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. Personally, I feel that any violence against
children
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 should be considered abuse and punishable by law.
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