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Write a letter to your manager to report a mistake you found in a magazine article about your company In your letter • Describe the magazine and the article. • What was the mistake? • Explain what you would like the manager to do about it.

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing
this
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 letter to report a mistake in your magazine article about my company. I am an avid reader of your business magazine, The Times. I find it very informative and insightful as it publishes the financial performance analysis of various companies, the views of industry leaders and the future business trends.
Last
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 week, I read an article about my company Microsoft's performance in your magazine which grabbed my attention.
While
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 the article has very minute details about the financials of my firm, I found
couple
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a couple
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 of metrics conspicuously incorrect. The
last
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quarter
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quarter's
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 revenue and gross margin published by you
does
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do
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 not match with
company's
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the company's
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 listed numbers,
that
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which
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 are submitted to the government and the media. With the above facts, I would request you to publish a regret notice in the upcoming edition with the correct figures.
This
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 is important as many shareholders make their investment decisions
reading
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by reading
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 your analysis reports. Accepting the mistake and
correct
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correcting
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 it will increase the trust
in
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of
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 your readers. I hope you will take
this
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 in
positive
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a positive
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sprit
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spirit
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 and I am looking forward to your prompt response. Yours sincerely, Sumit Dua

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coherence and cohesion
Consider adding a brief introduction that summarizes the context of the article before diving into the specifics of the mistake. This helps set the stage for the reader and ensures clarity.
task achievement
Review the section where you discuss the incorrect metrics; providing specific figures can strengthen your argument and enhance credibility.
coherence and cohesion
The letter follows a clear structure with a greeting and closing, maintaining a formal tone throughout.
task achievement
You effectively articulate the importance of correcting the error and its potential impact on stakeholders, which shows a good understanding of the relevance of the issue.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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