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The natural resources such as oil and fresh water are being used at an alarming rate . what problem does it cause how can we solve this problems?

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In recent times, the usage of natural
resources
 like petroleum and
water
are
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 constantly increasing.
As a
result
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 shortage of these
resources
 may occur but
this
 can be tackled by finding alternative ways to replace the
use
 of these materials. The major problem that arises from the constant usage of
a
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natural
resources
 is pollution. Raw material extraction and processing always have an impact on the environment
thus
, resulting in soil degradation, damage to the landscape,
water
 shortages, biodiversity loss, damage to ecosystem functions and global warming exacerbation.
For example
, products made of raw materials almost always results in greenhouse gas emissions, pollution, ecosystem damage or biodiversity loss.
Consequently
, these problems begin to have a negative effect on the health and well-being of the public. One effective solution to
this
 problem is by finding alternative natural materials that will serve the same purpose without having a harmful effect on the environment.
For example
, the
use
 of solar energy for powering all appliances that need electricity. Another clear example
,
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 would be to
use
 the wind to power windmills that can produce fresh
water
 and
also
, create reservoirs that collect
rain
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water
 through channels to be stored for when the need arises.
However
, these solutions are financially demanding but very beneficial. In conclusion, the constant
use
 of natural
resources
 can have negative effects on the environment and the people.
Therefore
, if the alternative routes are implemented, they can avert the impending tragedy that can be caused by environmental pollution and degradation
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depletion
  • exploitation
  • exhaustion
  • conserve
  • sustain
  • mitigate
  • alternative
  • renewable
  • efficiency
  • renewable energy sources
  • water management
  • irrigation
  • drought-resistant crops
  • recycling
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • carbon footprint
  • renewable energy infrastructure
  • regulations
  • awareness campaigns
  • education programs
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