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Nowadays, many people have access to computers and a large number of children enjoy playing video games. What are the advantages and disadvantages of playing video games for children ?

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Technology has become more accessible than it has ever been. Personal computers have become an essential and required part of a large number of people. Computers are being used by children all the way to adults.
Although
 computers are being utilised by youth for education purposes most of them is for playing
video
games
 which comes with its own pros as well as cons. Computer
games
 are being developed since the 20th century and have become more immersive and educational than ever before. Some of the
video
games
 aimed at kids are designed in a way to encourage creative thinking in young minds.
Games
 involving problem solving and teamwork can train the mind at an early age to develop valuable qualitative skills.
For example
, Abacus is a
video
 game that helps kids to learn basic maths using a colourful and engaging cube puzzle.
This
 helps to educate the kid about basic mathematics which we use every day in
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life.
On the other hand
,
video
games
 do bring some negative aspect as well.
Video
games
 are targeting to capture the attention of the user for a longer time thereby leading to kids or teens playing
games
 for hours. Certain
video
games
 may contain inappropriate content which can influence a child's mind in a bad way. Playing
games
 for a long time can
also
 lead to weaker eyesight and the blue light coming from the screen can affect the quality of sleep at a younger age. Summing up, just like a coin even
video
games
 have two sides. Having access to the right
video
games
 can help nourish a young brain but we should
also
 be aware of the content they are getting exposed to.
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