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A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary unpaid work at the museum.

#museum #home #people #work
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply to be a part-time volunteer at your museum and I would like to share my time and experience work for
this
 vacancy position. My name is Christy, I have found the voluntary job advertisement on your website and I am interested in applying for it. My educational major is history and art so I was so excited to be one of your members.
My
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 previous job is a receptionist so communication skills never bother me.
Moreover
, I
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 know the backgrounds of the exhibits of your museum so I can easily offer
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valuable information for the visitor.
In addition
, there is only a 2km distance from my house to the museum, and I am available during the weekend, which normally crowds of visitors for visiting.
Finally
, If you need any
further
 information, please contact me and I am looking forward to your good news soon . Yours Sincerely, Christy Chiu
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