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some people think that mobile phones are harmful for their children , while others disagree . discuss both sides and give your opinion .

#people #phones #children
There are those who have the belief that in the future
people
 are going to prefer to go on holiday in their own country
instead
 of
traveling
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 abroad. I totally disagree with
such
 an idea because most
individuals
 are more intrigued and interested in foreign places and cultures, and because of the increasing comfort and accessibility for
people
 to
travel
 long
distances
.
Firstly
, the main reason why I do not believe
people
 will rather spend their holidays on domestic trips
instead
 of international ones is simply due to
the
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human nature to think that the neighbour’s grass is always greener. What I mean is that
individuals
 tend to believe that their country is not as attractive or amusing as others and they prefer
traveling
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 abroad, even though most of the times it is more expensive and less convenient, seeking
for
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a more thrilling experience, and I do not see
this
 changing in the
next
 thousand years.
Secondly
,
people
 have a decreasing number of inconveniences to
travel
 long
distances
 as
the
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time goes by. The variety and the quality of our means of transportation are improving at a fast-pace,
consequently
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 the comfort is being enhanced and the costs reduced for
individuals
 to
travel
 long
distances
. To illustrate, If we think about 50 years ago, most
people
 in the world used to spend days on the road to visit a town not too far away, or 20 years ago when one would have to pay a fortune for a flight ticket, and we shall consider that those trips were not half as safe and comfortable as the ones
individuals
 do nowadays. To conclude, I reaffirm my opinion that
individuals
 will not opt for domestic trips rather than international ones in the future due to higher interest in foreign attractions and the raising convenience and
easeness
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easiness
 to
travel
 long
distances
.
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