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There are those who have the belief that in the future

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abroad. I totally disagree with

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are more intrigued and interested in foreign places and cultures, and because of the increasing comfort and accessibility for

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, the main reason why I do not believe

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will rather spend their holidays on domestic trips

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human nature to think that the neighbour’s grass is always greener. What I mean is that

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tend to believe that their country is not as attractive or amusing as others and they prefer

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abroad, even though most of the times it is more expensive and less convenient, seeking

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a more thrilling experience, and I do not see

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have a decreasing number of inconveniences to

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time goes by. The variety and the quality of our means of transportation are improving at a fast-pace,

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the comfort is being enhanced and the costs reduced for

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. To illustrate, If we think about 50 years ago, most

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in the world used to spend days on the road to visit a town not too far away, or 20 years ago when one would have to pay a fortune for a flight ticket, and we shall consider that those trips were not half as safe and comfortable as the ones

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do nowadays. To conclude, I reaffirm my opinion that

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will not opt for domestic trips rather than international ones in the future due to higher interest in foreign attractions and the raising convenience and

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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some people think that mobile phones are harmful for their children , while others disagree . discuss both sides and give your opinion .

Fully explain your ideas

nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. do you think is a positive or a negative development?

What impact does the tool have on planning and policy-making for future governments?

Individual greed and selfishness have been the basis of modern society. Some people think that we must return to older more traditional values such as respect for the and the local community in order to create a better world to live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countries such as Australia, Britain or America, in order to study at school, college or university. Why do so many people want to study in English? Why is English such an important international language? Give reasons for your answer.