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University students must pay all tuition fees, because it benefits mostly them individually, rather than the society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

#university #students #tuition #fees #society
The idea of tertiary attendees paying
total
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 cost of their
education
 has become controversial over the years with many
people
 believing that
this
 will help themself than the society.
However
, I do not agree with
this
 statement and I will explain why in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, there are a large number of rationales the
third
-level
education
students
 should be financially assisted in paying their
university
 fees, one of which is they cannot afford it. As graduate studies
is
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 the most expensive form of
education
, not only the individuals cannot bear it because they do not have
such
 a huge
amount
 of savings, but
also
 because most of those
people
 just finished their undergraduate studies and do not have a
good paying
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 job from which they can pay the
tution
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tuition
 fee. Apparently, the
university
 program cost is very high that if the
students
 are to pay the full
amount
 from their own budget, many of them will not choose to undertake
university
education
.
Furthermore
, there are many advantages to the communities as well when the
students
 of the
university
 do not have to pay the full
amount
 by themselves right away. Unlike those individuals who can study with the help of the government, and so many
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the
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higher
education
 and achieve a degree in
certain
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 course, those
people
 if they have to bear the total cost of the
education
, cannot
enroll
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 themselves which result in low-level
education
 and can lead to one of the major social
issue
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 as
such
 unemployment and
also
 increase in crime in the society as
people
 do not have jobs and money.
Hence
, more
students
 are encouraged to attend
the
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university
education
 with the financial help of the authorities, more
people
 have chances to get
an
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employment and become
a
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contributing member of
the
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society despite engaging in criminal activities to earn cash. To recapitulate, if the
university
sutdents
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students
 have to pay the full
amount
then
 they will not
enroll
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into
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on
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 the degree
education
 as they cannot afford it, and the unemployment rate will incline that leads to the
people
 pursuing criminal activities to earn money.
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