University students must pay all tuition fees, because it benefits mostly them individually, rather than the society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

The idea of tertiary attendees paying
total
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cost of their
education
has become controversial over the years with many
people
believing that
this
will help themself than the society.
However
, I do not agree with
this
statement and I will explain why in
this
essay.
To begin
with, there are a large number of rationales the
third
-level
education
students
should be financially assisted in paying their
university
fees, one of which is they cannot afford it. As graduate studies
is
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the most expensive form of
education
, not only the individuals cannot bear it because they do not have
such
a huge
amount
of savings, but
also
because most of those
people
just finished their undergraduate studies and do not have a
good paying
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job from which they can pay the
tution
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tuition

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fee. Apparently, the
university
program cost is very high that if the
students
are to pay the full
amount
from their own budget, many of them will not choose to undertake
university
education
.
Furthermore
, there are many advantages to the communities as well when the
students
of the
university
do not have to pay the full
amount
by themselves right away. Unlike those individuals who can study with the help of the government, and so many
enroll
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the
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higher
education
and achieve a degree in
certain
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a certain

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course, those
people
if they have to bear the total cost of the
education
, cannot
enroll
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themselves which result in low-level
education
and can lead to one of the major social
issue
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as
such
unemployment and
also
increase in crime in the society as
people
do not have jobs and money.
Hence
, more
students
are encouraged to attend
the
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university
education
with the financial help of the authorities, more
people
have chances to get
an
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employment and become
a
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contributing member of
the
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society despite engaging in criminal activities to earn cash. To recapitulate, if the
university
sutdents
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students

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have to pay the full
amount
then
they will not
enroll
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enrol

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into
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the degree
education
as they cannot afford it, and the unemployment rate will incline that leads to the
people
pursuing criminal activities to earn money.
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