The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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a significant increase in
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human
population
. The majority believes that overpopulation might lead to problems and negatively impact
on
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society.
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essay will discuss some causes why
this
has occurred and I completely agree that continues growth of
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might have a negative impact on society. One of the main factors driving
population
growth
is
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advanced medicine. The continuous improvements in
healthcare
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the healthcare

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industry have helped many
people
to stay healthy, live longer and improve
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quality of life.
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, medical facilities use
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technology to effectively treat patients and develop a new solution to almost any illness.
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used by doctors
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shows all problematic areas inside and allow patients to have an organ built specifically to replace the faulty ones. Another important factor is that the world is more educated than ever before. Educated
people
feel safe and secure, they are financially stable and
therefore
they can afford to have more children.
However
, I agree that
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of the world
population
leads to
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of issues in society, especially in underdeveloped countries. One of the biggest challenges of our time remains poverty, as Government are not able to provide basic needs
such
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food
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, clean drinking water, education, and healthcare.
Besides
,
people
living in unhealthy conditions are engaged in criminal activity.
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,
people
who are having less wealth
are often experience
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stress and anxiety, which puts a strain on
person
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or family, and
this
can lead to troubles
such
as violent or property crimes. To conclude, there
are
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number
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of factors which creates continuous growth of
overall
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population
and I consent that
this
is one of the main problems the world facing today.
Nevertheless
, I strongly believe that the Government’s are taking
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the required

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actions to mitigate and reduce
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the negative

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consequences of overpopulation.
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