Do you agree with the below statement ? A zoo serves no purpose.

Some people opine that
zoo
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has no benefits for
the
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society. I strongly disagree with
this
statement because visiting
zoo
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is a good recreational activity and home for different
creatures
.
Firstly
,
visit
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to
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a
zoo
help visitors to enjoy a good time and experience some unique. They get a change from their regular monotonous life. They watch birds, animals and other
creatures
which help them to be closer to
the
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nature.
This
is quite refreshing and peaceful. Families visit together and enjoy family time.
For instance
, as per the recent
survey
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most of the people accepted that
visting
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visiting
zoo
is their favourite leisure activity.
Therefore
,
zoo
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help
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people to take a break from their monotony.
Secondly
,
this
is a home for different
creatures
. These
creatures
are
povided
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provided
food and shelter there. They are kept in good conditions
otherwise
they would have died.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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