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children are currently having extra classes after normal lessons. what are the positive and negative effects? what is your opinion

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Nowadays, not only adults are busy with their works, but
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 school-age kid is getting busy with hours than their
parents
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 did before. As fact that extra
classes
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 become acceptable in some many countries. Especially in Asian schools, the children now struggle more nerve-racking problems with them in society.
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, attending to many extra
classes
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 on weekdays even at weekends leads to a lack of
time
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 for
kids
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. As result, they do not have an hour to spend on developing their hobbies
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 as how to play an instrument or playing sports outside that develop their health as well as mental health.
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, due to lack of
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 the
time
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 they can not spend
time
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 with their friends or taking part in social activity.
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, their ability to communication with others and lack of social skills now become serious to
parents
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 when raising
kids
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.
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, the expectation of children from
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 put them under pressure as
parents
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 want their
kids
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 always on top in every academic test. According to, the research over studying does not make children intelligent or smarter.
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, attending too many extra
classes
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such
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 as maths or science subjects can cause teenager’s cognitive impairment especially for young
kids
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.
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, kindergarten and primary school students due to a large amount of
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 focusing, lacking sleep and being stress.
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, extra
classes
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 provided a theoretical lesson which is mostly the same has compulsory
classes
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 while teenager needs to have particular knowledge, critical thinking and so on. To conclude,
parents
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 should join hand to create
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 kind of education
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 which has the creative, practical and stress-free environment for their kid and extra
classes
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 should be banned.

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