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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement ? A zoo has no useful purpose

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In today's world, more and more people are against
zoos
 and organise massive events with protests. It is believed by some part of a population that
zoo
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 has no useful purpose.
Firstly
,
this
 essay will discuss arguments for and,
secondly
, it will analyse why
this
 opinion may be misleading.
To begin
 with, on the one hand, these institutions imprison living creatures
adn
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and
 destroy their habitual life.
This
 is because of the fact that not only is it complicated for
animals
 to survive in small cells but
also
 the conditions are different from those in wild nature.
Hence
, a lot of species might die and become
extinctive
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extinct
extinction
 due to not
professional
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a professional
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 approach towards them and their surrounding.
For example
, one recent research has shown that more than 20% of
animals
 in
zoos
 died
beause
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because
 of awful living conditions and attitude from handlers.
However
, on the
othe
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other
 hand,
zoo
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the zoo
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 is a place that can teach
the
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society and serve as
source
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a source
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 of knowledge about the world and everything that surrounds us. The main reason for
this
 is that not only can future scientists and zoologists see and observe various creatures in real life but
also
 they can analyse
habits
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 of
animals
 and communicate with them.
As a result
, by primary research people become more knowledgeable and they have a chance to become a part of
a
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wild nature.
For instance
, one study has illustrated that vets have some practice in
zoos
 that allows them to understand how
animals
 act. Eventually, to conclude, I disagree with the idea that
that
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zoos
 have no purpose since they allow children to learn about
the
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nature and how everything is organised in it.
Hence
, they are able to analyse the life processes and different organism and
this
, in turn, may help them if they become zoologists or scientists.
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