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Nowadays, many people think that we should live with climate change instead of preventing it. Do you agree or not?

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In recent times,
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 has become a cause of concern for many
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 some individuals are of the opinion that we should embrace
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change
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 rather than preventing it. I disagree with
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 viewpoint as I believe that the forecasted disadvantages of
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 quite detrimental .
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, the world has begun to feel the negative effects of
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 and
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, various countries are starting to experience unpredictable weather changes.
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, in the United States of America, some states like Texas experienced a destructive snowstorm that claimed a few lives but many houses.
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, many
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 had to go days without light and water, some
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 lost their livelihoods and others millions of dollars worth of properties. It has been noted that Texas rarely experiences winter.
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 new development was attributed to
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 by meteorologists. The damage caused to the ozone layer by human's constant pollution is dangerous for every living creature and
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people
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 cannot live in unbearable conditions caused by these problems
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, the idea that we should seat around and allow calamity to befall our planet is absurd because if we do so the world would literally end as we know it.
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, the weather would become unbearable and unpredictable, the ice glaciers would melt off, the sea levels would rise rapidly, our ecosystem would be damaged, many animals would become extinct, the air would be polluted to name a few. In conclusion, there are numerous difficulties that would be experienced by the planet and its inhabitants if nothing is done to prevent
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. Understandably the methods of
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 prevention may be expensive
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, we owe it to future generations that they inherit a safe environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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