Many people put their personal information online (address, telephone number, and so on) for purposes such as signing up for social networks or online banking. Is this a positive or negative development?

It is commonly agreed that it is better to share private
information
online so that
users
can get access to certain pages.
However
, I believe that
this
trend has a negative impact because it means that more
people
are vulnerable to hacker attacks. Those who are in
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of giving their personal
information
to online platforms claim that
this
would help these organizations to approach their customers easily. The more
users
give personal data, the easier is to meet their needs and expectations.
This
would facilitate companies to develop products and offer services based on their customers' preferences. A typical example of
this
,
Instegram
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Instagram
has been using their
users
' data,
such
as age and location to show them pages related to
this
information
.
As a result
, it has facilitated the way to target
people
and instantly provide them with what they need based on their personal data.
On the other hand
, I would disagree with
this
statement because it has exposed
people
to hacker threats. Many
people
are unaware of the importance of creating strong passwords for their personal accounts or avoiding clicking unknown links, which would make them
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easy prey for cyberattacks.
This
type of attack could make peoples' lives more miserable because it always threat them by stealing money from their account or sharing private
information
with the public. The Sunday Times is recently reported that more than 50% of hacking come from the sign-up form because most
users
have chosen to use
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passwords for all their accounts. For that reason,
this
trend has contributed to many security breaches, which could destroy peoples' lives. To sum up,
although
providing private
information
to websites could help companies to
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their
users
' needs, I would go against
this
movement because it would be easier for hackers to steal
this
information
if
users
had failed in protecting them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ease of access
  • interconnected
  • communication
  • commerce
  • identity theft
  • privacy invasions
  • digitization
  • fraudulent activities
  • financial losses
  • reliance
  • digital profiles
  • social inequalities
  • cybersecurity measures
  • mitigate
  • digital convenience
  • mental health
  • anxiety
  • stress
  • online validation
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