Now a days international tourism is the biggest industry. It creates tension rather than understanding between people from different countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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International
tourism
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these days has become the largest in the business industry.Due to
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,it has contributed
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instead
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of yearning understanding among
the
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people
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from all over the
world
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. In regards to
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topic, I disagree that
tourism
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have
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caused
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,
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instead
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it has promoted better knowledge to everyone from any different
countries
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.
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with, since
tourism
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started to be known anywhere in the
world
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,
people
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have learned the importance of
this
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type of business.
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,there are some factors that made
tourism
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indsutry
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industry
a significant aspect to everyone.
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, considering
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one of the seven wonders of the
world
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which is the Chocolate hills situated in Bohol, Philippines.When
tourism
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began,
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certain place turned to be popular not only locally,but
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internationally,
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in
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it was acknowledged as one of the seven wonders of the
world
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.So
people
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around the
world
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have learned that there are more beautiful places they could see aside from their own country. International
tourism
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is
such
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an important contributor
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a country's economy.Not only ,but it
also
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helped gain
a productive mutual ties
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a productive mutual tie
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between
neighboring
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neighbouring
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countries
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.
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among
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countries
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from
Asia
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the Asia
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continent
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the Philippines,Singapore,South Korea and China have developed connections to promote
tourism
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.Like the travel packages that can facilitate different tourists to move from other places in a most practical way and less hassle. To conclude,in my opinion, I disagree that international
tourism
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have
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created tension rather than
undesrtanding
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understanding
between
people
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from different
countries
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,but I could say that
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instead
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it
resulted
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inresulted
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a positive impact
to
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everyone.
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