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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had huge negative effect on individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays,
internet
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 is indispensable in every person's
life
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. It
is often argue
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 that
people
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 and our society is
effected
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affected
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 by numerous social websites in
negative
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a negative
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 way. I entirely agree with
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 given perspective because humans are totally under the control of
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 invention.
This
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 bad consequences with the
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addition
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of
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 these websites.
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 with, masses started to create distance from their loved ones. In
modern
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 era,
people
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 mostly like to invest their time on social media and they are busy
to
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 making friends
to
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 those
ware
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 strangers. But, they don't have enough time for their close friends.
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, many
people
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 don't know about their relatives.
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, Earlier, families used to go for
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 together at each other's house but today, they just
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 on
internet
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the internet
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, not in real
life
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.
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, the obsession
of
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with
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 social media is another drawback. There are multitudinous apps available in the market. Every
second
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 human is addicted
with
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this
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 innovation.
This
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 obsession
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 their predominant goal of
life
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. In
this
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 way,
people
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 ruin their
life
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 in various ways.
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, A student
waste
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 their huge time on social networking sites
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instead
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on
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of
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study
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the study
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. As
its
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 result, he will
be fail
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 in exams which will directly affect
to
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his career . To conclude, it is undeniable that
this
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 invention has some merits but that pros are overshadowed by its cons. I think
,
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people
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 have to concentrate on their
real
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life
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 as well as on their future and tried to avoid
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 sort of silly habits.

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