Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had huge negative effect on individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays,
internet
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is indispensable in every person's
life
. It
is often argue
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that
people
and our society is
effected
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affected
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by numerous social websites in
negative
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a negative
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way. I entirely agree with
this
given perspective because humans are totally under the control of
this
invention.
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essay will argue how our society
get
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bad consequences with the
addiction
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of
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these websites.
To begin
with, masses started to create distance from their loved ones. In
modern
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era,
people
mostly like to invest their time on social media and they are busy
to
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making friends
to
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those
ware
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strangers. But, they don't have enough time for their close friends.
However
, many
people
don't know about their relatives.
For instance
, Earlier, families used to go for
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together at each other's house but today, they just
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on
internet
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the internet
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, not in real
life
.
Furthermore
, the obsession
of
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social media is another drawback. There are multitudinous apps available in the market. Every
second
human is addicted
with
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to
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this
innovation.
This
obsession
distract
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distracts
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their predominant goal of
life
. In
this
way,
people
ruin their
life
in various ways.
For example
, A student
waste
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their huge time on social networking sites
instead
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on
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study
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the study
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. As
its
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result, he will
be fail
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in exams which will directly affect
to
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his career . To conclude, it is undeniable that
this
invention has some merits but that pros are overshadowed by its cons. I think
,
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people
have to concentrate on their
real
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real-life
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life
as well as on their future and tried to avoid
this
sort of silly habits.
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