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Some people are of the opinion that being highly qualified is the only way to ensure a well-paying job. While others believe that having work experience is the best way to get a well-paying job. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Getting a high paying
job
 is a competitive endeavour.
Although
 some people argue that having a distinguished qualification is the only
way
 to bag a higher salary, there are others who opine that having work
experience
 is the best
way
 to ensure better pay.
This
 essay elaborates on both views and explains, why I believe that having work
experience
 is more important.
To begin
 with, there are some fields where without a higher qualification, the candidate is
uneligible
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 to get the
job
 in the
first
 place.
For example
, to land up
at
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a
job
 as a doctor, the person has to pass MBBS in the
first
 place. So in
such
 cases, it might be true that higher qualification only will help the individual. In other fields, highly qualified candidates, like those from IITs are considered more intelligent and
thus
 more innovative. So they end up getting higher pay packages.
However
, there is a caveat.
Such
 qualifications can help bag a good
first
job
, but
further
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 continuation depends on many other factors. Employers know that experienced people carry certain skill sets that freshers can rarely match and
thus
, are willing to pay higher for the same.
For instance
, a general practitioner working in Africa and treating Ebola patients will be vastly more experienced at managing the disease than an infectious disease consultant sitting in the UK.
Also
 work
experience
 helps people identify problems even before they arise and,
also
 teaches them how to deal with colleagues in a more convincing
way
. E.g An elder doctor appears to be more convincing to patients than a trainee. All in all, I believe that because of the qualities that
experience
 brings to the table like, niche skill sets and better human interactions, it is a better
way
 to get a
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job
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Highly qualified
  • Well-paying job
  • Securing
  • Knowledge
  • Expertise
  • Higher positions
  • Higher salaries
  • Practical skills
  • Real-world setting
  • Employers value
  • Professional connections
  • Ideal
  • Industry
  • Job role
  • Opinion
  • Experience
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