Watching a live performance such as a play, concert, or sporting event is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some
people
believe that watching a
sport
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event or concert as a live performance is much more
entertainable
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entertaining
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than watching them on
television
.
However
, while I agree that live events are more enjoyable , I
also
believe that online programmes
also
give some sort of enjoyment .
This
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view point
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viewpoint
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with relevant explanations and examples.
To begin
with , live performances always promote creative thinking and self-expression.
As a result
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enhance the person to concentrate on
present
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the present
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moment with
whole
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of his mind and body. For instances, during sporting
events
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if one
group
wins the match the
people
favourable to that particular
group
ready to break the boundaries and hug their superstars with all their love and affection.
In addition
, live performance
help
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the
people
to meet their favourite
heros
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heroes
hero
live.
Moreover
, it
also
provides the viewers
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opportunity to think creatively about the event especially in sports when the
group
loose
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the points
people
think
how
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then
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they
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could manage the points.Through all these ,
people
really enjoy
the
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live
perormance
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performance
.
On the other hand
,
television
aids a person to enjoy the
perormance
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performance
with a
group
of
people
such
as friends and relatives in his
comfortable
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zone.
Therefore
, there
is
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no barriers
for
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their enjoyment they can enjoy
to
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their
maximam
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maximum
.
Furthermore
, watching programmes
in
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on
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television
is rather
cost effective
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cost-effective
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and
time saving
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time-saving
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too, there is no need to spend
huge
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amount of money on ticket fares as well as no need to wait for
long
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time to start the programme.
Thus
, watching live performances on
television
also
enjoyable in
a different ways
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different ways
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. To conclude, attending a live programme is enjoyable , at the same time watching them on
television
also
enjoyable to some extends. No one can state that one is more enjoyable than
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the other
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other
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immersive experience
  • replicated
  • energy
  • atmosphere
  • sense of community
  • shared excitement
  • unforgettable
  • predictable
  • convenience
  • comfort
  • crowds
  • travel
  • multiple camera angles
  • close-ups
  • replays
  • enhancing
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