In some countries, people who commit less serious crimes are made to undertake community service* instead of a prison sentence. Some people believe that all people who have committed a crime should be sent to prison.

In recent years,
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crime
has become a big issue
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the general public. Some
people
believe that the
people
who
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less harmful
crime
have to send in aa prison. While others
also
argue that only punish by
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have to do some job support social community service. In my opinion, I partly agree no need to take them
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a prison. Discussed below are several reasons in
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of my perspective.
First
and foremost,
people
should recognize that light
crimers
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crimes
, drink driving or smoking in a
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area,
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to they no notice or only be
first
time be sentenced. Should give them a chance to regret yourself and repair
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be a better person in the future. Another point, I would like to mention that only give them to do
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support for
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,
also
the best ways to them can remember and no crimes again.
On the other hand
, there are several arguments against the statement that should send them in a prison to make a standard for other will no dare to
crime
whether light or diverse crimes. In fact,
people
have
this
opinion because we want to social become to better, no
crime
then
also
should punish them extremely so that.
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to control themselves to live better and always obey right politics. In conclusion, the
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facts have
creacted
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created
a dilemma when
people
evaluate the impact of
this
issue, and it is still a controversial issue. As far as I am concerned it could have both positive and negative impact.
People
should have
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further
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this
problem.
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