With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?

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civilization, life expectancy in western countries has increased significantly.

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, fewer babies are being born, causing the relative percentage of elderly people to increase.

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increased usage of pharmaceuticals. Due to the current large numbers of elderly people, the pressure put onto health care systems is increasing. In many western countries, the state provides most of the health care system.

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with increasing numbers of old people, higher percentages of state funding have to be allocated to health care and

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education.

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should be able to handle these changes. Governments will have been able to predict the changing demographic situations in their countries and plan

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having money taken away from them, but caring for the elderly is one of the key responsibilities of today’s governments. For the future, it might be necessary to ensure that an extra insurance charge is levied on people’s salaries in order that any future financial shortfall is met.

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but would allow governments to have the necessary funds available. In conclusion,

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today and in the future should be well able to deal with caring for their elderly. It is only a question of careful long-term forecasting and planning.

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With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?

Your opinion

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people like to eat in restaurants and at foodstands, others like to eat at home. Which do you prefer? Give reasons and examples to support your choice.

Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world. what do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures can be taken to solve it?