In some countries, criminal trials are shown on television for the public. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

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In every

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Governments had always had to deal with

thief

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the thief

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, assassins, hackers ,

in other words

criminals

. There

are

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some

country

where those people get their own trial shown on the screen.

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will argue why it is important for every citizen to see on

what are the consequences of being a criminal. In the modern

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more and more

country

such

as Europe or

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USA

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, in particular,

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in particular

decided to record criminal

trials

with cameras and in my

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there are many advantages in doing so.

This

could be considered as a new way to educate people at home by showing what are the punishments that a

unrespectfull

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respectful

unrespectful

person had to deal with.

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, by showing criminal

trials

the Governments

also

illustrate to

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society all of the disadvantages of being

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assassin

for

example

. A recent study conducted by the Crime University in Washington shows that

this

new strategy approached by the White House has reduced in the

last

5 years the crimes by at least 10%. Indeed showing on the big screen trial has many more advantages. One major

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coud

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for

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a case study for the crime students. Often students had to learn

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and

conseguences

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consequences

of being

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criminals

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criminals

from books at university and

this

is often a slower way to get

informations

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information

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example

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by watching on

trials

they can put in place what they have learnt

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form

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school and

immagine

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imagine

if they were the judge, what punishment they would have given.

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hand

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there are indeed some disadvantages of showing

trials

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, from the

criminals

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point of view

Privacy

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should be taken into considerations even if the person committed an offence, he

his

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a human and should have the same rights

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other people.

Secondly

, showing

trials

can encourage

small

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thief to give a try to commit an offence if they know

for

example

that the punishment is

worted

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worth

the trial.

This

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that

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the

disdvantages

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disadvantages

. In my

opinion

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criminals

trials

should be shown on

and even if

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were a criminal

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would accept the regret of

beeing

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being

seein

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seen

by the

country

as a bad person.

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Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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372 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

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Relevant & specific examples

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In some countries, criminal trials are shown on television for the public. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Your friend will stay with you on holiday, but you are unavailable on that date. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter apologize for not being able to be there; give a reason why you are not available; suggest another day for your friend's visit.

Some people argue that being highly qualified is the only way to ensure a high paying job,while others believe that having work experience is the best way to get awell paying job .discuss both and give your opinion.

Some people think that young people are suitable for learning foreign languages. Some people think adults are more suitable. Discuss both and give your opinion.

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing taffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree. What measure do you think might be effective.