Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society on individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that is important for children to make decision about matters that affect them. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Although
it is sometime
Replace the word
sometimes
though
that Correct your spelling
thought
children
ought to afforded to opted daily stuff, this
method bring
Change the verb form
brings
children
to only think about their own wished
, Replace the word
wishes
however
other Add the comma(s)
,however
people
believe that they supposed make
Fix the infinitive
to make
selection
on essential matters.
On the one hand, a number of Add an article
a selection
the selection
people
believe that children
should be allowed to select typical matters for instance
food, clothes and entertainment and i
agree. In other word, Change the capitalization
I
children
have to be Correct your spelling
reached
teached
gradually by their Correct your spelling
taught
parents
in making decision
about everyday stuff. Add an article
a decision
the decision
This
to train their brain and educate them about thinking skill which really required by them in daily life
. As a
result
the Add a comma
,result
children
can make a decision
for they
daily matter without asking someone for help or taking Correct pronoun usage
their
longer
duration to execute Correct article usage
a longer
selection
. Another point to consider is that, teaching Add an article
the selection
children
to be matured in their selection
of daily life
require
a process. Throughout Change the verb form
requires
this
process
many mistakes will be made, Add a comma
,process
hence
during this
period parents
supposed to play their vital roles in guidance and advice their children
about the consequence of their selection
. Besides
that, in the process to teach children
to be more accurate in making their decision
it is important to note that for all parents
to always remind their children
that we also
need to tolerate with
other Change preposition
apply
people
and not to become selfish.
On the other hand
, some people
trusted that children
have to afforded
Change the verb
afford
opportunity
to make a Add an article
the opportunity
an opportunity
decision
that affect
their Change the verb form
affects
life
. By doing Replace the word
lives
this
approach children
are expected to be more matured in making selection
. By doing Add an article
a selection
the selection
this
, children
will have their own goal and had spesific
target for their
Correct your spelling
specific
life
. For example
, parents
can ask their children
what they want to do after finish a scholl
session and Correct your spelling
school
provides
several options for them to opted. Change the verb form
provide
This
approach directly prevent
them to get involved in unnecessary activities Change the verb form
prevents
such
as playing games. It is important to highlight that, a
society and country will Remove the article
apply
also
obtain the benefit if
all Correct your spelling
of
parents
tough their children
to make decision
that can affect their Add an article
a decision
the decision
life
in future.
In conclusion, while many people
are vary
in their opinion, Change the verb form
vary
i
think is better for all Change the capitalization
I
parents
to teach their children
to make a simple decision
first
before expose them to make tough
Add an article
a tough
the tough
decision
. Children
requires
time to be matured in making Change the verb form
require
decision
and parents
should be a mentor for them as referrence
.Correct your spelling
reference
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