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A lot of money is spent on renovating old buildings. We should knock them down and build modern ones instead. To what extent to you agree or disagree with these statements

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Some people say we invest an enormous amount of money to preserve old buildings, while some others feel it is unnecessary, so we should demolish and erect skyscrapers to replace those. As both arguments have their own pros and cons,I do not completely agree or disagree with none of these statements. Ancient architectures are the living evidence of our heritage; those reflect the history of our ancestors' life. We have learnt so many aspects of human life
such
 as engineering, architecture and painting through the old constructions and monuments. Taj Mahal is one of the classical examples of the old building. We have admired the elegant beauty and architectural fantasy of
this
 building.
In addition
, nowadays it serves not only as a heritage site but
also
 as a site for tourist attraction.
On the other hand
, keeping an old building without damage is a costly exercise. It needs a significant amount of funds for maintenance. Sometimes those are a burden to governments, especially when those constructions are not cultural or archaeologically important.
Instead
 of keeping them, demolishing those historically non-significant building will be beneficial for the public. We could erect new vertical skyscrapers for hospital or schools or shopping mall with modern facilities in the same place, which will be more useful and futuristic. Dubai is an excellent example of
this
 approach, where they have erected many modern vertical living amenities at the site of non-significant old buildings. I believe demolishing old structures is a vital decision: it should only be done after the careful assessment of the importance of the new structure vs the cultural and religious significance of the old building.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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