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Some people think the typical teaching of a teacher and students in the class will not exist by the year 2050. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #teacher #students #class #year
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I agree with
this
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 statement which states that the typical teaching of a teacher and student in the physical class at some point soon. Technology has always surprised humans with new creations and advances. If you had asked people who existed 100 years ago about mobile phones and the progression of computers, they would have no idea about the topic. First of all, the speed of technological progression is enormously high and the possibility of having no physical
classes
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 as usual can occur sooner than 2050. We were witnesses of holding virtual
classes
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 during covid-19 pandemic. During
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 outrage of disease, education, especially at universities was changed to two different parts, in-campus and online as an option.
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, with the growth of population, especially in big cities, commuting to schools will be a huge problem shortly and traffic will contribute to making decisions about participating in online
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instead
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 of in-person ones.
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, transportation has its issues like the cost of commuting, and time spent in traffic. In conclusion, humans are moving toward a high level of enhancement and soon enough existence will see how the typical education system will change and students won't need to participate in physical
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 as we did in our childhood.
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Expand on the introduction to provide a clearer context and outline of the essay. This will help the reader understand your stance from the beginning.
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Provide more specific examples to support your main points. Mentioning things like advancements in virtual reality or AI in education could strengthen your argument.
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Improve the logical structure by ensuring each paragraph has a clear main idea and smooth transitions. For instance, the transition between discussing technological progression and the impact of COVID-19 could be more fluid.
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Your essay has a clear stance and covers relevant points related to the topic, which demonstrates a good understanding of the prompt.
coherence cohesion
Strong conclusion that effectively summarizes your main points and reiterates your position.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • resilient
  • adaptive
  • engagement
  • personalized learning
  • structure
  • social development
  • technological advancements
  • virtual reality
  • artificial intelligence
  • online learning platforms
  • flexible
  • accessible
  • remote learning
  • permanent shift
  • blended learning models
  • in-person instruction
  • digital resources
  • learning preferences
  • developing countries
  • digital transformation
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