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The advantages brought by the spread of English as “a global language” will outweigh the disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

There is no doubt that
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 has become a global
language
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 in business, diplomacy, education and politics. Due to unwillingly being enthusiastic about absorbing new skills, some
people
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 reluctantly assume admitting the values and facts of
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 being a universal one
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 the world.
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, they denounce the trend as a hinder to
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 existence of unique cultures. Languages are the carrier of culture. The culture would disappear as soon as the
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 spoken in it was out of
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. Young
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thus
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 forfeit their parents’ customs and living habits as they adapt themselves to
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 speaking. Their cultural heritage
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 would be pinned and
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 can be proved in many tribes of Europe and America.
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, the diversity of languages turns to be the pools of great ideas and thoughts. If they were extinguished
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 ordinary
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, our society would lose the power of advancing.
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, there are many valuable treasures in various cultures, like medical treatments and scientific records in history. They would all be thrown into
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 corner with their mother languages going out.
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, despite the drawbacks of the thriving of
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, I believe that it is
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 formidable trend driven by the globalization process.
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, the translating cost would plummet if all the
people
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 around the world manipulated the same
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.
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 have more chances to meet and negotiate with each other for boosting their business projects and diplomatic conferences. The obstacles of misunderstanding would suffocate
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 cooperation without efficient communication.
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, speaking the same
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 could draw
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 closer and it even could homogenize various beliefs.
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, the conflicts would be eliminated considerably.
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, the widespread
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education and abroad study prosper and easier. Students will rid
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 chores of learning
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 and
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 focus on the field they
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 to work in. To sum up, my opinion resembles those who support the wide
use
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 of
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. The rapid manipulation by the
people
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 would accelerate to alleviate the financial crisis obsessed with by
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international companies. To overcome the harms it brings, establishing
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specialized agencies funded by the governments to study and preserve the dying ones would be
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 good solution.

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