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The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The bar chart illustrates the levels of
air
pollution
 which
is
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are
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 caused by
electricity
 generation , transport and
industry
 in four countries (China , America , Japan, Australia) in the year 2021. Units are measured in
PPM
. Overall, the highest amount of
air
 is getting polluted due to the generation of
electricity
,
tranportation
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transportation
 and
industry
 in China. Meanwhile, the lowest level of
air
pollution
 is in Australia for transportation and industrial activities and
that is
 equal.
To begin
 with , the level of
pollution
 caused by
electricity
 generation is lesser than the
pollution
 caused due to transport and
industry
 and that number is slightly below 60
PPM
 in China. In Japan , the major contributor to
air
pollution
 is
industry
 and
that is
 above 40
PPM
.
On the other hand
 , there is
a
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the
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 least difference between the levels of
air
pollution
 caused by generating
electricity
 and transport which is around 1
PPM
 in Australia.
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