Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?
Social media usage has been getting more and more widespread . Some
sites
like Facebook or twitter
have known by all type of Change the capitalization
Twitter
people
.It is believed that the aforementioned sites
are detrimental to the
individuals and communities life. I am of the opinion that social Correct article usage
apply
sites
have a good impact on academic and business life. However
, it is evident that many people
are predisposed to asocial and addictive due to the
these Remove the article
apply
sites
.
It is truly obvious that social sites
make people
be asocial because these offer user to access what they want.Therefore
, they start to live close with
them because these make them be addictive .Change preposition
to
However
, they refrain from to spend
time with their friends or families .Both individuals and communities are affected Change the verb form
spending
from
Change preposition
by
this
situation because become addicted to these sites
destroys communications. To exemplify, according to some researches, new
generation Correct article usage
the new
do
not want to communicate with each other because they can not adjust themselves in the environment of school or other areas. Change the verb form
does
This
is because they do not know
spend time Add the particle
toknow
in
face to face because they know how to communicate with each other Change preposition
apply
in
social Change preposition
on
sites
. That’s why they encounter some problems for
maintaining socialization.
Change preposition
in
On the other hand
, these sites
aids
students to be effective because it accelerates Change the verb form
aid
working
process.Add an article
the working
This
is because,
Remove the comma
apply
many
prospective business man or woman Replace the quantifier
much
have
a Twitter account and it is possible to reach them via Change the verb form
has
this
platform. For instance
, as a student, ı can easily text with my teacher in
WhatsApp.Especially, if ı had a problem with my assignments, ı can consult my classmate about it.In Change preposition
on
this
way, ı do not need to go to the university, and ı both saved time and alleviated my problem. It is worthwhile to note that employees benefit from these sites
like zoom because many interviews with abroad or collaborates
are made by it. Replace the word
collaborators
Thus
, they can easily adjust themselves fully to the conversation thanks to easy access.
To sum up, social networking sites
leads
to Change the verb form
lead
communication
problem because it makes Add an article
a communication
people
asocial. Despite having this
issue, for students and workers , some opportunities like accessibility in their
Replace the word
there
are
Correct your spelling
area
are
emerged. It is Remove the redundancy
apply
more
convenient way for me because ı can easily overcome my problems Add an article
a more
about
my assignments.Change preposition
with
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite