Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible.

There is no doubt these days the importance of machinery in our lives either in working or studying
also
in playing video games.Some people think
this
is a negative development.While others believe is a positive thing to know how to work or study from
home
if they have not enough funds.In
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I am going to discuss both pros and cons of using automation from
home
and draw my personal conclusion. In the term of the positive side, one of the most significant benefits of using
technology
in the
home
for studying and working. The main reason is given to support
this
claim is
this
erasability of choosing the free time and not limited in a certain book and other reference or in a programme.
However
the
second
reason is that becoming more up to date in their work or in the study to feet the requirement and be more qualified in the position , to illustrate , the development of the
knowdlegment
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know segment
in your work is the most important ,
for example
as a pharmacist by the
technology
become up to date like reading the scientific journals . ,
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some people think there is a con to using
technology
at
home
.
Firstly
, the children becoming more dependent on
technology
for homework rather than search in their book copying the
home
from the website. ,
Secondly
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as we know
the
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social media will take the children from studying . In ,conclusion
although
the use of
technology
on children is a
controavirsal
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controversial
issue at
this
time.
Therefore
, I believe that the advantage outweigh the disadvantage
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